Separation Development

After receiving feedback and talking about my piece to various tutors and colleges I have made a few developments with my piece which are:

In terms of the symbolic imagery I was experimenting with last time I have decided that the Sunflower and the wedding dress imagery are two of the strongest visuals I have. I want to play with these visuals a lot more and develop some new shots with my DOP based on these. I will then try these during pre-light.

I am uncertain about the ink in the water shots as I don't want them to seem cliche however I realise they are. These are meant to show the water slowly getting cloudier symbolising a number of things but mainly my emotions spreading and the situation taking over. In order to make it less cliche I want to still fulfil this shot but in a different approach, the black ink works the best for this as its the boldest so I want to only use black and I want to play with the idea of pouring it into the water and showing this happen in a more emotive and even aggressive way as this reflect the concept a lot more. Having it done with different colours ad with syringes did look rally nice and effective but potentially too nice and therefore too cliche and not reflective on my true feelings. I will be experimenting with this new approach in pre-light to see how it works in comparison and then making a decision.

I am still debating removing the apples and the feathers as these again these have any other connotation linked to them that may be misleading. I am still going to shoot these in the most effective manor but if doing my editing stage I find the accurate connotations and concepts still aren't linking to them then I will remove them as this may be best for the piece.

The ring is a very strong visual however it is vey obvious. Despite this I want to keep it within my piece because it gives the anchorage I think is needed.

The balloon is probably my weakest visual as it seems too childish and again has many different connotations linked to it. Also I don't feel like is had enough visual impact. After discussion I have thought about maybe adapting this visual to add more stress by possibly finding an object other than a ballon to use. I am thinking into stress balls as a possibly or even a much thicker balloon which won't burst as easily so I can contort it more to show stress before it pops. Again this will be tested during pre-light.

Thinking into the facial water shots I have planned to do but not tested yet, I want to try these and develop these further. I wanted my face submerged in water abstracted by the air bubbles however this is rather simplistic and so I will test this in pre-light to see how much strength this visual has to it however I have a few other ideas for similar shots I want to develop and try with my DOP. I want to try putting my face upwards in the water so the camera focuses on the back of my head and hopefully my hair will create more powerful visuals while also still connecting it to me and showing the sense of drowning but also cleansing. I also want to try these fail shots in the fish tank to see if I can get some interesting shots side on. This will be discussed in my meeting with my DOP.

The dance movements, which again I haven't yet tested, are strong in my mind of what I want them to look like with many close ups and just certain muscles and parts of the body contorting to show stress, however I want to refine this shot list to give more meaning and impact. I have thought about what different parts of the body express and have decided limbs like arms and legs won't look visual strong or have much meaning however the torso does as this is where your main organs are and this also is where intimate areas are. I want to focus just on torso visuals particularly the back. When thinking about the movements I want to have these symbolise things, for example I want the shoulder blades to move together and apart to mimic separation and I want to show the spine in detail bent over so we can see how delicate the body can be. I also want the stomach to be moving in a stressful contorted want to show stress internally. I have also thought about getting hands involved by having hands move across certain body parts in symbolic ways. I could also keep the water theme through out this dance section as well by having the dancer move in ways which seem like she is also under water or make it tactile by involving some object from the water sequences in with the body. This will be discussed in my DOP meeting and then tested out in pre-light.

I have a meeting tomorrow with my DOP to discuss all of this and prepare to experiment in pre-light next week with all of this so that it can be refined to its full potential before shoot week.