I spent a lot of time debating weather the stress ball shots in my piece worked as it had been pointed out by a few people that it is one of the only more natural objects within the piece. It is also the object which most people want to ask questions about - Not in necessarily in a negative way but people are curious as to what it is in particular (if they don't know already) and they also ask about its significance to me etc. I really wanted to personally keep the stress ball within the piece because it is a significant object to me and I am assuming that even if nothing else the significance of it must be obvious hence why people notice it and ask about it more. It links to my childhood but in many personal ways but also on asking many of my peers of solar age and generation they know what they are as they have their own experiences with these stress balls as children. I also love the irony in these stress balls because they were given to children who struggled sometimes yet they had happy faces on them? It is only now I look back as an adult that I see the irony in that and this is one of the many reasons I want it in my piece and the way it is abused and destroyed in the piece is one of the sights of stress but also loss of childhood and innocence. In conclusion I have reworked in the stress ball to the new edit because I really want it in their for conceptual reasons but I have changed the order of these visuals slightly and placement of them to try and make it flow visually a bit smoother.
The water line in my shots was another part that a lot of people noticed and I myself felt some of the visuals worked better without it already and hence why I had framed in on some of these to take that away. However in other shots I left the water line because I wanted it to be evident that things were going in and out the water however when I tried taking all the water lines away by framing in I actually really loved the effect. You could still tell by the movement of the objects and water that things were entering and exiting the tank however now it was much more exciting to see as all focus was on these objects making a much nicer visual. It allowed it to be more immersive so I now have no water lines in this edit apart from the tank filling and emptying at the start and end.
I had previously played with speed on some of my clips never slowing down (as majority was filmed in high frame rates and already in slo mo!) but instead speeding some clips up to add excitement and tension as if there was too much slow motion in one place it just seemed a bit dull. I went back and played with the speed again because having re-watched I don't know if I got the speed right on some things. It was also pointed out to me that some images were just too fast. I went through and thought about speed in terms of how object relate to one another and to the concept/story. I then adjusted the speed to make it interesting and varied through out but also to add to the piece as some faster sections build up the tension. I was much happier with how the speeds worked with one another more.
I also tried to move the order round again for this edit as I was happy with the beginning and end but the middle was the messiest section as the least clear. I tried to think through all the feedback and through the emotional story I am trying to tell and then moved a lot of visuals around to work with this. I am a bit happier with the order now but am still unsettled and unsure about certain things - I know soon I will have to get harsher with myself and the edit and eliminate the weaker points that just aren't working. I did take out the apple entering the water shot because as much as I loved this visuals it messed with the apples individual object narrative because it left the apple in limbo and this was partly feedback I recieved. I feel like the apple is enough at the beginning to show the initial disruption and it is much stronger left this way. I also removed the water droplet down the dress shot as I was never keen on this when I reviewed footage because it did just look a bit random and odd. I put it in because I thought it would help with he concept however when it was pointed out that it didn't I knew straight away that it should be removed as I had doubts anyway. Lastly I removed one of the last ink spreading shots as I felt like I had too many of these and the metaphor and visual is interesting but after too many times it seems simplistic and lacks meaning so I reduced the amount of ink because I wanted it to keep meaning.
I am glad that I have progressed further with my edit and have made more changes in preparation to meet my effects consultant tomorrow to work on this further. (22.03.18)
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